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My father shuts his door against the heat,
and cowers in the air-conditioned dark --
sleeps off the war.

He battles in the far-off gloom, and wet,
and terror, breathing labored, heartbeat quick --
a fight ahead:

I push in, switch the light on, then a start --
he rears up, and begins another war,
with me the foe.

Braced against his rage, bearing the brunt
of blows, and shouts, and rains from anger past,
I stand my ground.

The secrecy and shadow of his fear
and mine emerge, to twist from damp and bright
to dry and dim.

I never cry.  He pushes me away,
slips back into the cold and arid room,
brings on the night,

fleeing sharp images of combat,
closing past and present -- shuts his eyes
to time and me.
Inspired by Robert Hayden's "Those Winter Sundays." A poem about the undertones of my relationship with my father.
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GrimmAssassin Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Powerful.
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fernknits Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! Just a note to let you know that I've featured this piece in my journal :)
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fernknits Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
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fernknits Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like the darkness of this, the wars that are weaved into the framework of the poem itself. I think the three line stanzas work really well, too, with the break from emdashes at the end of stanzas a good separation from the old war and the current.
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fernknits Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! I'm glad to know the emdashes are doing what I hoped they would.
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No worries, lovely. :heart:
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