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my mother flicks
her cigarette
switches
on the flame
under the black
cast-iron

hair gleaming
titian
in the lamp-light

when she sees me
and boils over

my head hits
the bittersweet wall-to-wall
cosmos in my eyes

trapped
under the table
like evenings of liver 
onions limas and sit
there until you eat
i guard the injuries

turning from indigo
to pitch
 A response to Lucille Clifton's "to my last period."  Title is from the saying, "If you can't stand the heat, get out of the kitchen."
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Given 2013-10-19
if you can't stand -- by *fernknits is an evocative response to one perspective on womanhood. ( Featured by neurotype )
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FridayatMidnight Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is an interesting poem. xP
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fernknits Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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FridayatMidnight Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
^^
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is absolutely brilliant, and I can completely see why it was given a DD. So sad, but almost bittersweet in a way. Like the narrator is looking back on something that has made her stronger and therefore that experience still has some value.
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for reading, and for the very insightful comment. <3
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you <3
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justmeandmycoffee Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
WTG Fern!!!  Congrats!
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks so much, justme <3
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justmeandmycoffee Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
You're welcome!
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ArtSUPER123 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
Beautiful. It's random, but beautiful. :(
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That means a lot to me.  Thank you. <3
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DJ-Bleach Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
So...did she beat them...or something?
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes, that's the idea.  The mother "boils over" and attacks the speaker, causing her to fall to the floor under the table.
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DJ-Bleach Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013
Oh, thanks. I'm not good with this stuff.
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :)
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Seilf Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats!!!
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! <3
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sciencevsart Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is so sad....
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It is sad... I'm glad that part of my life is over now.

Thanks for your comment. <3
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mizzmint Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on having your piece featured as one of today's Daily Deviations!

Well deserved :love:
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! <3
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mizzmint Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome :hug:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove: Have a nice day! :heart:
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! It totally made my day.  <3
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    My pleasure, enjoy it :happybounce:
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ByeCosmos Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013
This is terrific. :) (Smile) 
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! <3 and thank you for the fave!
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ByeCosmos Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013
You're welcome XD
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I can't believe you got a DD already. So proud of you! That's awesome, lovely lady. :heart: Can't word how happy I am for you!
La la la la Congratulations!
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you, lovely!  It's all your doing.  <3  Thank you so much for inviting me here.
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camelopardalisinblue Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Not my doing at all. I had nothing to do with you getting a DD -- that was all skill, lovely. :heart:
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you <3
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neurotype Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
the enjambment really grew on me. :)
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
OH MY GOODNESS THANK YOU THANK YOU! (also thank you for the new word ... enjambment <3)
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neurotype Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:giggle:
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chewyraezen Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
brilliant! I can't wait to dive deep into your gallery and read more!
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fernknits Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh my gosh! Thank you so much!
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chewyraezen Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I absolutely LOVE what I have read so far!!!
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